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1、
我打算下星期去看望我中學(xué)時的英語老師。她已執(zhí)教三十年,具有豐富的教學(xué)經(jīng)驗。她
的教學(xué)方法給我留下了深刻的印象。在她的幫助下,我的英語曾有很大的進步。
學(xué)生習(xí)作·外教批改
I will1 plan to visit my English teacher next week.She has been a teacher for 30 years.With
her help,my English improved fastly 2 rapidly.She gave me made a good impression on
me.3
I studied in No 2 Middle
2、 School.My English teacher is was4 a qualified teacher.She always
helped us in with our English.She is was friendly.At her class,the class is Her class was
full of laughing5 laughter so gave me a good impression.6 I’ll never forget my English
teacher.
I’m I was poor in English,and My my English
3、teacher often tell told me “Where there is a
will,there is a way.” So I think if I work hard and try my best to learn English,I’ll study
well. So I thought that if I worked hard and tried my best to learn English,I would
succeed.
Up to now,many years past.7 Many years have passed since then. I a
4、lways still remember
my English teacher.I want to thank her and give me courage for8 giving me
encouragement9.
旁 批
1.plan這個詞已經(jīng)有將來的含義,所以不必再用will。
2.沒有fastly這個詞。可以用rapidly或quickly代替。
3.這才是正確的表達。
4.雖然可能這位女士現(xiàn)在還是一位好老師,但你仍然要用過去時態(tài),因為你在講述你念中學(xué)時候的事情。
5.正確的詞組是:full of laughter。
6.你已經(jīng)說過這句話,沒必要再重復(fù)。
7.你
5、應(yīng)該用現(xiàn)在完成時態(tài),因為你正在談?wù)撨^去的一件事情對現(xiàn)在的影響。
8.正確的結(jié)構(gòu)是:thank someone for doing something。
9.在這個語境中encouragement比courage好。同時,它的意思也不一樣。要確保你所選的詞能準確地表達你的意思。
這是一篇較差的作文。文中的時態(tài)用得很不好。故事明顯發(fā)生在過去,但是作者用了
一般現(xiàn)在時。即便如此,句子結(jié)構(gòu)也不正確。
作者的詞性知識也不足(如:laughing/laughter,courage/encouragement)。高三水平應(yīng)
該對詞性很熟悉并知道如何將它們用在恰當?shù)恼Z境中。
值得肯定的是,文
6、章的內(nèi)容表明作者對題目要求還是明確的,并較好地回答了題目所
要求的內(nèi)容。
高分作文秘訣之一:使用正確的時態(tài)。例如:
Instead of (不要說:)A big fire destroy the forest which belong to the villagers.
Use (要說:)A big fire destroyed the forest which belonged to the villagers.
Instead of (不要說:)The village changed greatly since he left his hometown.
Use (要說
7、:)The village has changed greatly since he left his hometown.
Instead of (不要說:)Nancy had promised to come tonight.
Use (要說:)Nancy promised to come tonight.
Instead of (不要說:)So I write to apply for the job.
Use (要說:)So I am writing to apply for the job.
姓名 劉翔 性別 男 籍貫 上海
生日 1983年7月13日 身高 1
8、.88m 體重 74公斤
項目 田徑(110米欄)
基
本
情
況 2000年8月入選國家青年田徑隊
2002年獲亞運會及亞錦標賽冠軍
2020年在英國世界室內(nèi)田徑錦標賽中獲60米跨欄第三
2020年8月27日獲雅典奧運會冠軍,成績是12秒91,追平世界紀錄,打破奧運會記錄
參考范文:
Liu Xiang,with a height of 188cm and a weight of 74kg,was born on July 13,1983 in
Shanghai.In August,2000,he was admitted to the National Track a
9、nd Field Youth Team.In
2002,he won the gold medals in the men’s 110m hurdles at the Asian Games and Asian
Championship.The next year he took third in the 60m hurdles at the World Indoor
Championships in England.On August 27,2020,Liu won the men’s 110m hurdles final in
12.91 seconds at the Athens Olympic Games,equaling the world record set and breaking the
Olympic record.